Danke für die Kritik.
Hier ein etwas besseres, wie ich finde.

The Night

When I see outside
I wonder why the day is gone,
there is night.
All around it's dark,
nowhere any light.
Shadows are creeping,
no reason to hide,
are coming toward me.
Just a moment I thought
before I spoke word for word,
to stop the darkness
by defeating the weakness
of myself.
My anger has won,
gets more control.
The words of pain
start to rain,
fall down on my body,
down on my soul.
Maybe I'm just one
but my feelings are my strenght,
my anger my sword,
my love my shield.
Each move accompanied by a spark,
I walk deep into the heart of my fear,
while I'm crying tear for tear.
I don't no the lenght
and it also doesn't matter
but it was like I walked hundrets of miles.
I went througe the village,
went over some isles,
went to the place
where I saw your face
the first time.
Now I couldn't sleeping
I couldn't dream.
I want to scream
but I can't do.
Thought I stopped the night
but I just was getting a part of it.
I thouht it was a lie,
the price was much too high,
but in my arms I'm holding you.
The air I caught
was filled with your special scent.
I felt your heat,
your eyes were closed,
can't see these emeralds.
The only thing I need
to get out of this wrong worlds
is the answer of your heart.
So the darkness has to go apart.
That's the way my heart choosed,
I haven't said anything
just to let you the chance to begin.
But now I don't see any sense,
does I thought it is a sin?
I've got no time for such a tense
while I'm loosing nearly all I got.
I'm lost in a knot
of lies and discretion.

~Demonhunter~